I wanted to kiss her


After loads of serious stuff, i decided to write a lighter one. (or else I know my blog buddies may eat me alive for all the confusions that I did to them over a period).


Though I suck in this genre (55 fiction), i believe this one would be alright. (at least I believe so). Please leave your feedback.



I WANTED TO KISS HER


I saw her in bus stop. She was damn beautiful. In her polished apple cheeks, I saw reflection of early morning sun in-between her shiny hairs. The road was almost empty. I couldn’t control myself. I wanted to kiss her. When I moved forward, bus arrived. She took her schoolbag to join her nursery friends.


I LIKED.....

Recently I read a post by Amit singh - Religion; my thoughts. Its a profound one. I always like his style of touching high topics in a more humble tone. I would recommend this.

30 comments:

Shruti said...
December 12, 2009 at 12:12 PM

Hahaha :P :D
This was really nice bharathi!! I loved t to the core!Though its your second attempt you really fared well! :D

Shankar said...
December 12, 2009 at 12:12 PM

wow.. good one bharathi...

Bharathi said...
December 12, 2009 at 12:36 PM

@ Shruti: thanks queen.

@ Shank: i am glad that u liked it. Thanks for a quick comment.

SiD said...
December 12, 2009 at 12:47 PM

hey that was cute...:D

and I really hope it was written with the intension of cuteness...:P

cos other wise it is a crime...:p...

ok ok...cynic in me speaking, i should shut up now...

Oh well loved it...

Bharathi said...
December 12, 2009 at 1:02 PM

@ Sid: thanks pal. I am happy that a nice witty writer like you loved it. Its indeed a nice complement.

The whole idea is to make the readers believe that I was describing a lady untill the last line. After reading ur comment, I think I gave it a little over dose :-)

Shilpa said...
December 12, 2009 at 1:03 PM

:) It was so cute!!! sweet.


shilpa

Mahesh Kalaal said...
December 12, 2009 at 1:07 PM

bit expected ..
as i wrote a similar one earlier....
Nice one

Bharathi said...
December 12, 2009 at 1:19 PM

@ Shilpa: hey, thanks a lot.

@ Mahesh: you expected it? I thought I had given a brilliant twist at the end. how sad. lets see how others feel too. thanks for commenting though.

SiD said...
December 12, 2009 at 2:53 PM

@Bharathi
The FF55 is ossum buddy.... its just that I am reading about this child abuse a lot so the cynical mind speaks...:D

Bharathi said...
December 12, 2009 at 4:58 PM

@ SID: No problem. I understood.

Roja said...
December 12, 2009 at 6:40 PM
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Rajalakshmi Umapathy said...
December 12, 2009 at 6:42 PM

Hey bharathi.. cute one pa.. Even I expected it. I knew that your wife would kill you if you saw another woman like that..:):P lols. Kids are so cute these days. irresistible. I know:P:D

Bharathi said...
December 12, 2009 at 7:42 PM

@ Raji: you expected too? probably the good mask that I am wearing is hindering. I think I should relinquish my mask and show you my true face :D

vEnKy said...
December 13, 2009 at 7:54 AM

To be honest i found out it would be a little when i read the first line. Not bad i should say. And i dont know why the road was empty, that too near a bus stop :-D and she is a nursery child waiting in the bust stop. ;-) ok ok May be i am analyzing this a bit too much :-)

Chetan said...
December 13, 2009 at 10:55 AM

hey
nice one

Bharathi said...
December 13, 2009 at 3:00 PM

@ Venky: so you too predicted it? fine but I think the road can be (almost) empty as I have seen school buses pickingup kids as early as 7:15 am in some outer areas.

@ Chetan: Thanks a lot pal.

BK Chowla said...
December 13, 2009 at 6:53 PM

Very nice and really enjoyed every word you wrote.

Bharathi said...
December 13, 2009 at 7:09 PM

@ BK Chawla: thanks a lot. I am happy that you liked it.

Rachana Shakyawar said...
December 14, 2009 at 12:56 AM

@ Bharathi

Very well written boy...
I cound not imagine...whats the next untill I reda till the last dot.

Simply outstanding!!
I loved it!

Keep the spark ALive..

Shruti said...
December 14, 2009 at 2:13 AM

>>Rachana
Bharathi is a boy?! ROTFL :D :P

Bharathi said...
December 14, 2009 at 12:43 PM

@ Rachna: Thanks a lot. It made me very happy. And dont bother Shruti's comment. Keep going.

@ Shruti: yeah. how can she call a guy who turned 23 recently as a boy.

bliss said...
December 14, 2009 at 8:33 PM

that was so sweet!! actually i feel that way wenever i see any little kid!! they are just adorable! bur apart that, this was great one!!!! cheers!

Bharathi said...
December 15, 2009 at 7:25 AM

@ Bliss: Thanks a lot. Nice comments like this keep me going.

Everymatter said...
December 16, 2009 at 4:24 PM

really very nice one

Bharathi said...
December 16, 2009 at 5:01 PM

@ Everymatter: welcome to this blog. I am very happy that you liked it. Keep visiting.

Vishnu said...
December 19, 2009 at 5:13 PM

sema mokka.. but u took it very interesting.. continue continue..

Vipul Grover said...
December 19, 2009 at 11:44 PM

gudie gudie :)
man this job thing sucks.. um missing so mch stff here on blogosphere :(

Bharathi said...
December 20, 2009 at 11:38 AM

@ Vishnu: ithukku paer than vanja pugazhchi ya?

@ Vipul: Tks buddy. But remember job will feed food. but blog woudnt. (I think I almost turned as a moneyfetish now a days)

Shas said...
December 21, 2009 at 10:45 PM

Good one. Enjoyed reading it.

Bharathi said...
December 22, 2009 at 10:05 AM

@ Shas: Thanks a lot.

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